For this piece of writing I have focussing on my vocabulary and punctuation. I have been learning to
- use a range of precise vocabulary to communicate meaning (Year ⅞)
- use all basic punctuation independently and attempt more complex punctuation (eg semicolons, colons, parentheses) (Year 7/8
The pieces of my writing that are highlighted green are where I have shown my vocabulary and punctuation goal
"Chloe get off" Zoella yelled as her dog was licking her face in bed , Chloe sits there silently looking at Zoella. But then the silence was interuped by Zoellas mum ( Chantell ) yelling "hurry up get out of bed we are already late, pick up your day bag and get in the car" "but i,m not dressed" Zoella replies "well get dressed"
Once Zoella was dressed she came through to her mother screaming "STOP YELLING IN THE HOUSE" "you were yelling first" Zoella argues "who's house is this oh yeah its mine" "and when its time to tidy it magicly becomes my house" Zoella and her mum argues.
They were just about to leave for church but then Zoellas father comes in and has
a few animals and crops off their farm and Zoellas little sister ( Molly ) "QUICK GET ALL YOU CAN AND GET INTO THE BASMENT" Zoellas father (Luke) screams in a hurry
"why" Zoella replies "No time to waste will tell you when you get into the basment now quick grab some food, bottles of water and some mattreses QUICK WE HAVE TEN MINUTES GO GO GO!!!!" Zoella grabs 3 boxes of pizza,all the fruit and